The major problem with this story is the amount of errors it contains, from spelling errors to typing errors and quite often the same thing will be repeated twice (e.g. “He pulled the straps of her dress down”… half a page later “…reached for the straps of her dress, never taking her eyes off his as she pulled them down”). To me this looks like the story has been published way before it was ready to be released to the public and it’s a shame because there is great potential for this story if it had just had a little more time spent on it.
That said, I am still going to give this story 4 stars because of the descriptive writing and character development. Reading this story you can imagine the characters of Destiny and James and the situation they are in. It takes skill to bring characters to life but that’s a skill that Lynn Davis has.