To start with I wasn’t too keen on the storyline because
although it is a fiction story I believe that it should still be believable. A
good writer can make even the most unbelievable things believable and for me
this storyline just wasn’t realistic. However, the ending (which I’m not going
to reveal so you’ll have to read the story) made me rethink the whole story and
bumped this up from 3.5 stars to 4 stars.
The major problem with this story is the amount of errors it
contains, from spelling errors to typing errors and quite often the same thing
will be repeated twice (e.g. “He pulled the straps of her dress down”… half a
page later “…reached for the straps of her dress, never taking her eyes off his
as she pulled them down”). To me this looks like the story has been published
way before it was ready to be released to the public and it’s a shame because
there is great potential for this story if it had just had a little more time
spent on it.
That said, I am still going to give this story 4 stars
because of the descriptive writing and character development. Reading this
story you can imagine the characters of Destiny and James and the situation
they are in. It takes skill to bring characters to life but that’s a skill that
Lynn Davis has.
(4/5 Stars)
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